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I love playing though it i just don't like doing the run around part but 10/10 though ^^

Love it 😍

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I am playing as a female yet in the beginning in the dialogue for when we are 13 and trying to get the Divine Water Herb when asking whether He Gang could leave a few stalks for us on the 7th line the woman said “Brother Gang, this moron is harassing me. Get rid of him” rather than ‘her’

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Righteous paragon in talents says Magnaminous instead of Magnanimous

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  • Tang Ruo puts her arm on the back of your head and flips himself (herself) over your charging body. She taps your spine with her foot, causing you to stumble.

  • At last, you feel it. Feel the power that truly separates the mortals from those who have ascended beyong (beyond)

  • He Jun shouts as his body erupts with an unimaginable /for your/ speed.

  • You glance towards Tang Ruo, yet she appears unbothered by the corpses, save for a slight aversion in his (her) countenance.

  • You dig it into (in) and the taste of what seems (seemed, at first,) like plain rice amazes you.

  • We don’t how she does this (it), but her rice is ten time (times) better than if any of us tried to cook the same dish.”

  • Suddenly, as (though) becoming shy, she turns away her head (turns her head, looks away,) and scratches her ear.

  • Noticing you, injured yet eager to come to her aid, Ai smiles a small, barely noticeable, yet /the most/ sincere smile, before /she/ resolutely shakes (shaking) her head.

  • Ai yells, the indignant in her washing away the guilt (the indignity she felt washing away the guilt)

  • “But? without strength they? matter not.” (“but, without strength… they matter not.”)

  • “So, what it is (is it) you’re saying? That those without power have no use at all?”

  • Not if you (want) to make sure that something like today doesn’t happen again.

  • And you are (far) from being the only one. Unlike its usual state, with only a few dozen (dozens) of disciples watching or participating in the fights, the Arena now is (is currently) almost half-full — an astounding turnout, probably the highest it has even (ever) been for an Early-Houtian contender.

  • You spot Jing Guo, obviously tense and uncomfortable, squirm in his chair. ➡️ (visibly tense and uncomfortable, squirming in his chair.)

  • He withstands the blow, not cut or injured, but is pushed back a dozen of steps. ➡️ (He withstands the blow without being cut or injured, but is forcefully pushed back a dozen steps.)

  • “Not bad. In your stage, you’re probably unrivaled (unmatched/unparalleled). But against me, it’s (still) far from enough.”

  • Tang Ruo is obviously present, sitting closed-eyes on her flying sword. ➡️ (Tang Ruo is unmistakably present, seated with closed eyes on her flying sword.)

  • Whether others are too afraid of her, her wild demeanor too intense for them to handle, or her loneliness is a display of disciples’ contempt for her origin, you do not know. ➡️ (It’s unclear whether others fear her, find her intense wild demeanor too daunting, or if her solitude reflects the disdain for her origins among the disciples.)

  • There also Jing Guo and Yuan Fang, conversing with each other about some matters. ➡️ (There’s also Jing Guo and Yuan Fang, deep in conversation about some topic or another.)

  • Dozens of feet in length, with dark red carcass and tens of tiny little legs crawling at its sides. Two thick, long tentacle-like whiskers spread out from its face and six black as the void itself eyes stare straight into your very soul. Hissing, but with the sheer volume of its voice the noise more resembles a growl, the giant centipede raises a third of its body, its skeleton unnaturally nimble, and charges straight at you. ➡️ (Several feet in length, with a dark red exoskeleton and numerous tiny legs scuttling at its sides. Two thick, long tentacle-like whiskers extend from its face, and six eyes as black as the void gaze into your soul. Emitting a hiss that resembles more of a growl due to its sheer volume, the giant centipede raises a third of its body with unnatural agility and charges directly at you.)

  • “The lizard kid and the Whore Chao’s daughter are the only, one (ones) with some amount of guts.”

  • Yang Bohai then carefully studies your group with his dangerous, bloodthirsty gaze. You hear gulps all around you, even see some disciples go weak in the knees — and when the Elder’s eyes meet yours, your understand why. ➡️ (Yang Bohai carefully studies your group with his dangerous, bloodthirsty gaze. You hear gulps all around you, and see some disciples go weak in the knees — when the Elder’s eyes meet yours, you understand why.)

  • There’s nothing inside them but death. But blood, gore and suffering. All people have a scent, and this old man smells of murder. ➡️ (There’s nothing inside them but death, blood, gore, and suffering. Everyone has a scent, and this old man reeks of murder.)

  • No ones dares to speak either. His loud, thunderous voice has already been enough, the hint of something utterly wicked in his tone makes your skin crawl in terror. ➡️ (No one dares to speak. His loud, thunderous voice alone is enough; the hint of something utterly wicked in his tone makes your skin crawl in terror.)

  • Smartly, you decide to keep silent: talking back to man like that sounds painful. ➡️ (Wisely, you choose to remain silent; talking back to a man like that seems like it would be painful.)

  • Alongside a massive bomb of terrible destruction. Are you truly planning on using it, damning both your Senior Brother, who now sits with a peaceful expression, and your fellow disciples to certain death for no fault of their own? ➡️ (Alongside a massive bomb of terrible destruction, are you truly planning to use it, condemning both your Senior Brother, now sitting with a peaceful expression, and your fellow disciples to certain death for no fault of their own?)

  • First of (off), this Danger Zone is quite… strange.

  • If some of you have seconds (are having second) thoughts, I can crush your skulls right now to rid you of them.

  • We’ve already sent a few dozen disciples back (in). Two of them even came back, so quit whining.

  • You look forward, towards dozens of disciples sitting cross-legged, in total mental felicity, before a young man with a zither in his hands. His long, thin fingers carefully caress the instrument’s strings and he lets out a blindingly charming smile. His features are already too pretty for a man — big, expressive blue eyes, full, thick crimson lips and long lashes that flopped with every blink — yet now, with a cute dimple on the left side of his mouth, he appears unnaturally comely. ➡️ (You look ahead to find dozens of disciples sitting cross-legged, in complete mental serenity, gathered around a young man skillfully playing a zither. His long, slender fingers delicately caress the strings of the instrument as he flashes a blindingly charming smile. His features are strikingly beautiful for a man — with big, expressive blue eyes, full, thick crimson lips, and long lashes that flutter with every blink. The addition of a cute dimple on the left side of his mouth makes him appear unnaturally handsome.)

  • And when you think it’s all there is, just a pretty, androgynous youth, comes the voice. The most ethereal, the most angelic voice you’ve ever heard. A voice that grips your heart, that gently forces you to listen and refuses to let go of its hold until its finished. ➡️ (And just when you think he’s merely a pretty, androgynous youth, his voice emerges. It’s the most ethereal, the most angelic voice you’ve ever heard. A voice that grips your heart, gently compelling you to listen, refusing to release its hold until it’s finished.)

  • You approach the group of Martial Artists you noticed before. A couple of disciples from your own sect are already there, drinking tea as they jubilantly tell each other stories. ➡️ (You approach the group of Martial Artists you had noticed earlier. A couple of disciples from your own sect are already there, sipping tea and jubilantly exchanging stories with each other.)

  • Does (the) name Zhong Zhi ring a bell?

  • Treat it as (the) senseless ramblings of your Senior Brother.

  • I’ve seen far too many fellow disciples die to lack caution. ➡️ (Zones are chaotic, dangerous, and unpredictable. I’ve witnessed too many fellow disciples perish due to a lack of caution.)

  • The demonic disciples stop a hundred yards from the spot of your gathering and their hungry gazes start judging you with a (an) intensity that lacks any notion of restraint.

  • One man, in particular, stands out. Pale skin, sick countenance, white hair and crimson, blood-colored eyes: when his gaze lazily finds yours, your body freezes. Deep in your soul, you feel primal, instinctual fear. This man is a predator, one that stands at the apex of natural food chain. And you, to him, is nothing but a helpless pray. ➡️ (One man stands out in particular: pale skin, a sickly countenance, white hair, and eyes the color of crimson blood. When his gaze lazily meets yours, your body freezes. Deep within your soul, you feel primal, instinctual fear. This man is a predator, standing at the apex of the natural food chain. To him, you are nothing but helpless prey.)

  • He leans back, grinning an ugly grin, and you, unwittingly, breathe out in relief. Now that you can think again, you realize you recognize him: he’s titled, a rarity among those who haven’t undergone their Second Rebirth, the Young Blood Hunter: his name founded in him hunting, and slaying, thousands of Martial Artists just like you. ➡️ (He leans back, grinning an ugly grin, and unwittingly, you exhale in relief. Now that you can think again, you realize you recognize him: he’s titled, a rarity among those who haven’t undergone their Second Rebirth, the Young Blood Hunter — renowned for hunting down and slaying thousands of Martial Artists like you.)

  • The air around you is hot and moist, as sterling (pristine) as only uninhibited land can be. But it’s not just pureness you feel when you breathe. (Yet, it’s not just purity you sense when you breathe.)

  • A quick look around confirms that you’re alone, with no one else to share your discovery with. An eventuality you were prepared with (for), but one that makes you…

  • /are/ indifferent.

  • /are/ relieved.

  • /are/ excited.

  • /are/ nervous.

  • /are/ disappointed.

  • Her/His answers only confuse you further, but you understand that the woman/man already does her/his (best) to communicate in a language she/he obviously isn’t fluent in.

  • His empyrean is much /more/ better sounding

  • The old man waves, causing all the bows and /the/ spears to be lowered /down/ .

  • The world we (we’re) in , it’s (is) called the Endless Jungle Realm.

  • These outsiders are to be called Apostles of the Heavens. Because that’s who they are and that’s what their purpose it (is).

  • No more words are needed (need) to be said — let the battle begin.

  • But out (our) time is very limited, Apostle. Scriptures say that after your arrival into the world, you’ll have about two months to assemble the key, before terrible things /will/ begin to happen.”

  • Please, Brother (Sister) Ming Yue, you flatter me too much. The difference between us is vast and unsurmountable, enough to form a sea of inequality.

  • Similar to you, another Martial Artist have (has) taken control of the natives, a man named Fu Bing.

  • For a moment, you delve into your memory, trying to figure out why (what) caused the girl to behave this way, and realization comes to you soon after.

  • Your sibling lowers her head, and a pink blush appears on her cheeks, before she agitatedly clenches (her) fists and replies.

  • Her words, however, are interrupted by (the) startling ringing of a bell.

  • instead of the houses you spent your days walking (in), there are burning, smoking structures of wood (…) and instead of that fresh, pure air there is a rotten smell of blood and death.

  • because the sight of corpses that riddles (riddle) the intimately known streets rids (rid) you of your ability to think.

  • “Don’t come close!” — she yells, but breathing (breaths) out in relief after recognizing you.

  • There, she suddenly removes one of the wooden planks in the walls, revealing a large, (previously) concealed /before/, compartment.

  • It doesn’t take long for the owner of the voice to found (find) your family.

  • He smiles, wickedly and lewdly, as he stares at the women. ➡️ (His wicked, lewd smile lingers as his gaze fixates unsettlingly on the women.)

  • he swings his ax, embedding the weapon into your only parent’s skull, freezing her terrified and beginning (pleading) expression (upon her wrinkled face…) forever.

  • Your sister shrieks, (a) piercing, eardrum shattering sound full of emotion, and runs to your mother’s body.

  • How did this happen? How did a sunny, happy day turned (turn) into this? How? Why?…

  • one that you bought and trained in secret, one that you hoped would be your trump car (card)

  • Good. Leave alone (me be) for now, I need to figure some things out.

  • That burned, disfigured face /it/ still the same

  • The disciple of the Omniscient Sage has also poured tea, a kind of it that you don’t recognize but with a fragrance that makes you want to take long, deep whiff. (you do not recognize the herb used, but the tea’s fragrance makes you want to take a long, deep whiff.)

  • In fact, the only remaining sign of her previous poor state are (is) her (torn clothes, still) stained with blood.

  • The Princess seems (distant) from her usual self: you are used to her being a lofty, almost otherworldly figure that (would) never put anyone in her eyes . (;) but now, with her unable to control her anger and frustration, the princess is much more human-like (appears far more… human).

  • You wonder just how badly did Long Chen humiliate her (Long Chen humiliated her), for the imperial heir to be this irritable.

  • In the battles on that level (a battle of that scale), few minutes is a lot of time.

  • “Desire for knowledge and respect for those who has (have) it are essential for any educated, civilized man. Doesn’t Princess agree?”

  • as (though) it was king, and everything else in the world its servant.

  • He tilts his head (,) amusingly (amused) instead (,) and smiles a (confident,) light (smile.) /, but confident smile./

  • The two lock (locked) /their/ gazes, /with/ neither budging nor escalating the argument further.

  • sighs (,) and sits down, palming

  • For many, the princess had to explain the purpose of both to you and Xiwen. The effects make you salivate. ➡️ (Many of the artifacts required explanation for both you and Xiwen, and the princess graciously obliged. The effects of said artifacts could almost make you salivate.)

  • A pair of earring (earrings) that allows its wearers to communicate with nothing but their thoughts.

  • Boots (that) enhance your speed two-fold.

  • “Well, will (with) all of this, we can definitely take Long Chen on”

  • Although with the Princess’s riches we have a strong possibility of winning. However, our opponent this time is not an ordinary top-tier Peak-Houtian. ➡️ (Although the princess’s riches give us a strong possibility of winning, our opponent this time is not an ordinary toptier PeakHoutian.)

  • There are many in our stage who can do it (so).

  • Knowing that man, he will go (all) out from the start, not bothering to conserve his strength. I will do my best to exhaust his resources (,) and then, when I give a signal, I will paralyze him for a split second.

  • Just remember not to be seen beforehand, the effect (element) of surprise is imperative for our success.”

  • And now, when (with) her belly carried (carrying) your unborn child, (the) love you had (have) for your (her) has grown even further.

  • (While) It’s (it’s) true that she always has (has always) been inexpressive, which meant (made) her every gesture of affection that much more meaningful, but you (you still) certainly could not imagine her frowning at your exclamations.

  • The Blood King snaps his finger and the ground beneath you lits (lights) up

  • and knocked up (my) daughter.

  • And now, the third and final /is/ step

  • enough to leave them cripple (crippled) if not outright killed.

  • the chains bounding (binding) you

  • beside (besides) your wife dying in your arms

  • His fault that you lived the last decade on a (the) run, like a pathetic criminal.

  • When you’re finally done and the man who used to haunt (you) /during both/ day and night is but a pile of scattered meat, you collapse.

  • Nothing is impossible, everything is withing (within) the realm of possibility.

  • Your wife, child (,) and sister dead?

  • He was never one to be humble, but (right) now he seems much more (even) cockier than usual.

  • but your Senior Brother looks as if the outcome of today was already set in stone and no one could a change (it) even if they tried.

  • Flesh regrows on /the/ your lookalike’s skeleton in a matter of seconds, not leaving behind even a scar.

  • Her freakish, long nails dig into your eyes, her teeth biting hard into your shoulder. ➡️ (Her freakishly long nails dig into your eyes as her teeth bite hard into your shoulder.)

  • One chews your flesh and gouges your sight, viciously tearing you apart in (an) animalistic fashion.

  • Thankfully, the rest of the disciples is (are) occupied by your ally and you can focus on Ai and Tigress instead.

  • but the poor girl doesn’t know yet just how big you (your) gains have been during this expedition.

  • He’s thrown to the ground, with covered in blood Long Chen standing above him. (above him stands Long Chen, covered in blood.)

  • Xiwen, (with) his beautiful face ruining (littered) by bruises (with bruises), smiles. There are (Some of his) teeth (are) missing, you notice, but he doesn’t seem to care. Instead, his earring flashes red and he spreads out his hands (arms).

  • A golden, winged figure rushes through the sky at (a) terrifying speed

  • Humanoid in shape, yet covered /in/ head to toe in glistening scales . (, and) wielding a familiar /to you/ majestic sword with blood dripping from its blade.

  • Long Chen’s head on the ground, unattached to (detached from) his body, and with a frozen expression of disbelief (disbelief frozen upon his face).

  • “The fact that someone as proud and quick-tempered as you attempts (is attempting) to negotiate for peace tells me all I need to know.”

  • She hasn’t explained to you the pill’s effect (the pill’s effects to you) either, but, assuming from (judging by) her words, it’s something that would allow you to participate in this battle.

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  • The fluttering leaves, the flying (of the) insects, even the moments (movements) of (the) people around you has decreased their pace (have slowed) — it takes you a moment to adjust to your new, enhanced perception (,) and you wonder just how long it’ll last and what would be the (kind of) side-effects (will follow).

  • In attempts (an attempt) to retaliate, Long Chen swings his club around, but despite its might, the weapon is too slow

  • Long Chen, who before (previously would have) fiercely attacked with his club, suddenly stopped (stops). His whole body froze (freezing) as he stared (stares) somewhere in (into) the distance with a blank, empty look (expression).

  • Did the arrogant and honorable princess just used (use)… poison?

  • The mist of blood that (was) once /has been/ your Senior Brother condenses back into a human shape /again/ and Long Chen, naked as the day he was born, appears before you.

  • Upon contact with Long Chen’s skull, you don’t simply break through the broke (bone): such great might is hidden in your punch that your opponent’s head explodes under the impact of your hit.

  • Long Chen lifeless body falls to the ground, not a sign of life in his corpse. ➡️ (Long Chen’s body falls to the ground, lifeless.)

  • “Come, get up, we need to check if that monster if (is) finally dead.”

  • “Alright. Let’s make a deal then. You’ll hand over the stone and we’ll bound (bind) you with (an) Energy-suppressing rope. I will guarantee your safety.”

  • “I (can) depart to the underworld any time.”

  • but realizing the pointless (pointlessness) of it all, swallows his words.

  • When Long Chen came to you, offering /a/ five thousand gold to join his army, you refused.

  • A bum that lucked out and risen (rose) above his destined stature.

  • Taking on them all alone? ➡️ (Taking them all on alone?)

  • There’s a chance of her become someone important in the future. Which means, you’ll benefit a lot from ingraining yourself to her while that’s still a possibility. ➡️ (There’s a chance she’ll become someone important in the future, which means you’ll benefit a lot from ingratiating yourself to her while its still possible.)

  • but Tang Ruo wouldn’t even look at you twice. ➡️ (but Tang Ruo wouldn’t even look twice at you.)

  • She throws himself (herself) into the slaughter and spares no mercy.

  • Five, ten, fifteen – and then /a/ thirty more.

  • They activate their wondrous skills, use tactics and even resort to, out of necessity, to the use of under-handed means like means, yet Long Chen gets up time and time again. ➡️ (They activate their formidable skills, use tactics, and even resort to the use of under-handed means, out of necessity. Yet, Long Chen gets up time and time again.)

  • replaying in your head that punch again and again. ➡️ (unable to help mentally replaying that punch over and over again.)

  • How many worlds you’ve (have you) traversed to find them? How many enemies you’ve (have you) made after kidnapping daughters, sisters (,) and brides? How many wars you’ve (have you) waged (…) and how many lives you’ve taken to gather them all (how many lives have you taken to gather them all)?

  • Countless. And (Yet,) you don’t feel the slightest amount of remorse (,) Because (because), as you give these women a glance, you reassure yourself that all your actions have been worth it.

  • But… how can you exist in this world when she was not (isn’t) by your side?

  • What (All that) persists is anguish Unbearable agony as they scream out in agony (, and finally, their screams of unbearable agony echo around me…) How can they not, when all of them are burning alive?

  • You look up. You feel their anger. makes the sky darken and clouds full of thunder to form (The sky darkens, clouds form, and thunder rumbles — loudly echoing their fury). /And/ You Smirk. What can (the) Heavens do against a God?

  • As (the) women begin to slowly die (slowly begin to die), their quintessential energies (being) used to fuel your insanity of a (heretical)/(insane) plan, a portal starts to form.

  • but that would be akin to calling a sparkle from rubbing sticks a great wildfire. ➡️ (but that would be akin to equating a raging wild fire to a mere spark.)

  • “Will it damage his (hers)?” — you query, referring to the Princess.

  • “That’s a possibility, but I doubt it. To shatter arrogance as thick as his (hers), Long Chen’s club is not big enough.”

  • He walked forward as (if) he owned this entire world and, in a way, you realize he really did

  • (With his) Hands claspes (clasped) behind his back, Long Chen took (takes) heavy, firm steps. Hearing you approach, he turns his head and smiles (in a) friendly (manner).

  • Mental alignments (ailments) can get dangerous, if left untreated.

  • You used means I didn’t thought (never thought) you’d be willing to use.

  • Long Chen snorts, though you don’t (know) whether he does so at (due to) your naivety or out of (feeling) insult.

  • No. But, you’ve (have you) seen a masked disciple running around?

  • Long Chen pursues (purses) his lips

  • It’s not like I’m bursting with (the) desire to do so.

  • You think I’m willing to enter that snake (Snake’s) nest? Hell no.

  • Her unapologetic gaze drills you int (into you)

  • All your (you) need is to restore your qi and then bend the void to your will.

  • but you need you (the) fuel desperately and mortal ants are not good for anything else.

  • Only now (do) you know: your entire civilization (, to him,) is a merely (has merely been) a pig that he has fattened (for consumption) , and you yourself is (are) the main dish.

  • But you can’t let him see your weak (weakness).

  • To glance at her again and lose her, to watch myself stray from who I was (, who I) used to be…

  • If you lived in a (the) world I lived in,

  • yet the choice (of) which road is (to) pick is not yours to make.

  • kept together by /the/ sheer will through angst and pain.

  • You wander (wonder) if they are having the same conversation you had, with the incomprehensible man inside his mind (their minds).

Bugs:

  • Health did not increase with phoenix paste between Tang Ruo & Tigress battle.

  • The poem about “the harsh training required to reach the peak.” and the one about “your misfortune of being born into a decadent clan.” both use he pronouns rather than she although I am playing a female

Suggestion:

  • If injured in the battle with the monster when saving the boy + we try to save Ai or Ai has a high opinion of us, add a scene where Ai heals us or treats us after everything before we start going back to the sect. Probably have it happen regardless of whether we have regeneration because Ai would probably care for us either way.

  • In the Tang Ruo arena fight scene against Jing Qianfan, maybe add some options for the way we react?

  • Add an extra reaction from Xiwen to some of the poems. {The love poem about him, the poems about freedom, poems about cruelty to commoners, poem about our father}: Some level of questioning, just as we questioned him on whether his poem was about himself, or maybe something that tells us more about him.

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i cant wait for the next update of this game all of them are nice in their own ways but i wonder if there will be some kind of special training method for the after expedition mc other than training with the elders or absorbing Qi like there is already in game last time the meditation of mc was stopped because of assassins so i can just wonder how stronger the mc would get if he/she actually made it i also am anxious to meet the true family of mc from the zhong clan and the first parts of its history just thinking about everything to come and how certain events with ros and the what ifs in the story that are still blank like as i said the mc true family from zhong clan it makes me very excited and anxious at same time i cant wait to play more and dev,dont give up your game is awesome and a few things you did on the history for power balancing and be not completely unfair is still unseen by some but after i had read several times the story i saw how broken ruo was in the power balance while mc was both on the winning side of the race of evolution and the losing side when competing with ruo thus causing mc to be talked down and mistreated after the Qi awakening the first emperor gave mc i saw scenes which by far its noticeable what you are cooking and i want to see far more of it. and on my earlier post about a second option to having Qi powers or inner energy ones it was not a critical post just a suggestion to add for people that dont like the plot twist of inner energy being a lie and the newgame+ like power up of using Qi and such so that these people dont feel annoyed i particularly dont mind that after the danger zone you lose inner energy  since the first emperor himself said it was squeezing off the mc potential so in that point having no inner energy is actually perfect since at some point mc will be far more than ruo could ever dream of and that is already glimpsed at the battle against the zhong clan and its allies where you help ruo against them not counting at that moment mc was fighting several adversaries of late houtian or even peak if i remenber correctly so yes i know how broken mc can be i just said what i said on my last post because i wanted to give more options in case people feel annoyed by events that lead consequences such as the one that gave mc qi powers  and removed its progress with inner energy and i repeat that i found the immensurable power boost after the danger zone the mc got awesome.im sorry if i cant convey the correct mensage even now but what im trying to tell is that i dont have anything to complain about your game i just thought of a suggestion and i expressed myself badly i dont know if im expressing myself good enough and i convey the correct message... if this dont express i dont know what will: this game is one of the best ones of its genre i know of and the only one of its genre i actually care and count the days to play even a minuscule update of it
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Calm down

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when next update?

also are you alright dev?

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Please when is the next update

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By the way when you are in the cave with Princess Ruo. She is called the option call her "him" 

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Does anyone know if after beating the vampire I can survive the encounter with Mei at the cave?  

How do you fight the vampire

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Choose dialogue options correctly, like don't be accusatory

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Anyone know how to avoid being turned ugly by the demon queen or can I just avoid her existence or is there a way to kill the demon queen

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Edit the Story Variable.

Legit Way? after checking the HTML File... nope, if you kill the Son, you are instantly screwed to be ugly and annoyingly you can't ignore the mission to go out.

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Welp guess I'm deleting my save... again

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Yo, can someone tell me how to get Monke Man as my master

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Learn Void Step before the expedition and don't piss him off on the peeping event, then reject the other masters when offered mentorship. That's it.

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On a less sketchy "I edit the story variable". Maybe there should be a way to keep being beautiful and be the demon queen daughter? Like what else do i need 5000 Charisma if I can't bullshit a Crazy Demon Queen? So since there is no choice for that yet I just edit more story variable because redoing the whole save just to not kill pang bo is annoying. I will headcanon this as "Cuckoo in the head Lesbian MC manage to convince the crazy demon queen to keep her being pretty by pure bullshit and convincing her that being beautiful is the new ugly :D."

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You know, I feel strange. Last Time I play this I remember that I can make a Lesbian character with my Female MC able to write a poem about love about He Mei. but it seems like it is not an option anymore. Are you currently rewriting it? If not, can you just unlock it? I rather see my female MC flirt like a male toward other girls than getting blocked for no reason from the love interest. I also remember Elder Rin was unlocked for Female but does the requirement change? If I'm not allowed to be Elder Rin disciple as female I might try to edit the save to allow me to do it as female because my last save was at that point.

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Or at least tell me what variable I need to turn on so a female character can date female character?

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Ok I think i got it... I think... When you download the save file, you can edit the save data. In there there is something that say "_ro" if you change the false into true... It should allow you to date girl as girl. Just don't blame me or the author if some of the love scene looks weird. I would accept weird love scene more than being locked out from same-sex love interest.

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Oh yea, I forget "Scene.prototype.obfuscator" and "Scene.prototype.deobfuscator" still exist, actually. to make sure the game can load your edited save. you also need to edit the HTML File by changing the thing that basically "Obfuscate your save data into password". Basically if you edit the HTML, go to find then change the password obfuscator to have the same word. like for example there is a line that written " "!": "E", " then all you need to do is change it into " "!": "!", ". I'm not a tech wiz so the gist of it is change it into the same wording then it would works.

Sorry author, BUT I'M that determined to unlock the lesbian route.

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Ok, I tried and fail it seems the author make the password encryption more annoying. So I will decide to test if I can edit the variable change from the story itself. i think i finally got it just use notepad++ and change "ro false" into "ro true" it should work i think since I change the variable of the story itself and not the save data. The only downside is you need to recreate your character.

EDIT:  Tried this, and IT WORK! Manage to flirt with Female Tang Ruo as a Female :D

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I know I'm late saying this but the creator of the game live in Russia and LGBTQ content are banned there. For legal reasons he deleted everything about the gays/lesbians content.

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Shout out to my second favourite russian(after Lenin of course )

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Need help!!! Please can someone explain me why in Poetry competition with Xiwen i just can't write a love's poetry for him or Ruo? ... and it seems i just cannot have them like RO at all... is it because my MC is not female? :'(

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Yep. Author is russian and he had to remove LGBT content to avoid legal issues.

Someone posted a workaround somewhere involving editing the game's code but I can't find them for you

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Sooo sad... but still thank you!! I was soo lost. 💙

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Search the game in choice of mods site, they have uhh some m menu where you can change various modifications, such as having  "enable romance despite same gender" and others really "unfair"

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But idk if they have the game in web, i play in android

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Ok i will try that... thank you very much ;)

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It's cool and all but I wish there was an easier way to save. Even if you save it to a file, you still lose everything. 

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How can you read tang's pov after the tournament at the beginning? Is it only aviable for male or is it something else ?

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Its premium only content

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ngl kinda lame that you're forced to become pretty much a cultivating vampire after the expedition.

story wise i guess the reveal makes sense? but the way you're forced to penny pinch qi in the "normal" difficulty and above makes it so you can't use (or more so get heavily discouraged of using) your powers over saving it to upgrade your stats. to make matters worse your powers don't actually change the outcome of fights significantly over just using your physicals, so theres basically no reason to use say your new elemental stuff and lose 3 qi permanently over just passing a stat check for agility/constitution/strength. or god forbid you want to use your regeneration perk because now you spend 1 qi to regen, better stick with talismans and choose/roll another perk if you're not after poison immunity (which we might have lost anyway when our whole body got remade by tang wei)

if i could choose that i'd stay with inner energy, because honestly this whole qi business has not been worth it in any form or shape whatsoever, at least mechanically.

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he could actually make it a choice with tang wei to keep things as they were or to receive the  power of the Qi cause at the point of the expedition the mc "can" be a middle stage houtian if they manipulate mei mei to give the ascension pill or receive the blessing of the spirit inside the expedition zone so basically you will go to late houtian,peak and on, so the mc evolution will be inside the "normal-guidelines" instead of being the nightmare-fueling monster of power that tang wei was xiwen himself was surprised with mc's appearence and he/she being able to harness qi considering that the grandfather of mc still hasn't taught him/her to use since he was absent most of mc's life so i think it can be a feature for those that dont want to go all their effort on building a good strong character to be in vain at that point. and a a alternative ending that differentiates from qi route and inner energy route that would open more room for possibility of replaying the game differently instead of a semi-set path that gradually changes until you receive qi.

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Lil question, in the "field trip" you have the option to give up or fight and the hostage (your kinda friend) dies... is there a way to save him and still kick there asses ?

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To save friend you have to tell Le about Mei Mei’s plan to kill him, so he’ll feel grateful and owe you a favor. To do that you need to agree to kill him.

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telling him that at the beginning of the field Trip?

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Yeyeyee, the option to talk abut his relationship with MeiMei.

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thank you very much

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Yw bro :3

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Hi, I like the story so far (volcano tribe). Thanks for the enormous amount of work.

Here’s feedback for when you have time and energy to read it: Fights are great fun. Minor preference: the numbers measuring progress feel flat. It reminds me of some Play by Post rules. You can’t feel wealthy counting cents #analogy. I feel a lot of my choices don’t have much impact (= I prefer games with less content but with more impact). I feel some choices have totally good / bad options. I find it acceptable when it means following the code of wulin, not so much when it’s a random encounter. Still, I went that far because the plot is very good and some choices matter. One suggestion: some choices about the world could be made about the world just as much as about the main character. It works, it doesn’t break anything, and it lets go with people’s fantasy. Of course, which ones and how needs to be thought through.

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my mc when considering the  xiwen deal

xiwen: you could stay by the empire side and I will not harm you or you can join us, what will it be

my mc: what kind of stupid ass deal is that, no matter what I did, I never got any respect around here, heck some weeks ago I had to fight and kill two tangs that were involved in a attack and some guards who were supposed to protect the target, failed and died on me, leaving me to getting slap for my "uselessness" by another tang, without me explaining but the tang allowed his "son in law" to tell his own side of the story, so fuck the empire I am done

xiwen: ..... ughhh welcome to the club

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How do you rent out the whole inn in the beginning

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Be arrogant to the guard

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Now I am sad. First time playing. Played over an hour or more. Decided to reload and I am stuck at info screen. I can't progress. I can only check options like attributes and others. Return to game just places me at the info screen again. Lost all motivation to try from beginning again......

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that happend to me to. Someone need to fix this bug

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that bug is common with pretty much every wip. it prolly  wont be fixed anytime soon 

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Great game! Already on a 3rd playthrough! 

Just one question how do i became Ma Rin's disciple? I already did all the others masters path so I want to complete it 

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i believe you need to be male(choose the male presest character just incase) , have good-looking trait(probably not). when ma rin asks you to look into xiwen before the Zone you agree, tak to xiwen at the volcano before talking to Tang Wei. When you wake up and talk to Ma Rin just agree to the things she want you to do, then when you learn about Xiwen tell her(might not be needed). then when you start choosing elders choose her.

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thank you 

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Hi guys, pls can anyone tell me how to use that "protected save" option , coz I cant see that option anywhere and whenever I close the chrome all my progress disappears and I had to start from scratch!!!

press the upload save button by all the others at the top (by the stat view button). then scroll to the bottom and there's a tiny button that lets you upload the file. then you just scroll back up and press upload save

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Windows Defender and Opera is simply blocking the download saying there's a virus. I trust the dev since I've downloaded this game multiple times already, but what could have happened? This never happened with this game before.

But the browser version works just fine, seems there's just something wrong with the download maybe.

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Yeah, I just created an exception to it in Windows Defender. 

I tried playing in the browser version but it messed up my save, and Tang Ruo whom I had decided to be a woman was regarded as a male. Also, I like to use the Cheat Master thing to edit stats, and it didn't work on the browser version.

But, well, nothing bad happened when I used it after putting an exception on windows defender. It may just be something wrong with the file, maybe it had a link, like a patreon link, and it got flagged? Regardless, just adding an exception worked fine.

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This is so strange lmao, I have no idea why this is happening. Tried checking it out myself with different browsers/antivirus scans, but I don't get anything. It's just an HTML page, you can get it yourself by right-clicking while the game is loaded and choosing 'save page' lol

I will play the browser version later but the download was blocked.  claimed it was a virus (trojan)

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... what?
Can a html file even carry a trojan? It's literally just a saved webpage (then again, I'm not that knowledgeable about these things)

I don't know why either but I figured I would let you know in case it's causing an actual issue for you or in the future.

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the demon queen made me her daughter and now I'm ugly

such is life.

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When will bios be updated?

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Soon. Hopefully...

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I kind of wish there was a Reputation system along with the Alignment system, like in reputation we have good/evil & unknown/well-known or something of the sort, depending on your rep for being good or bad you are either a bandit or something or a virtuous person I dunno, you just have some kind of rep. So my alignment can be different from how people see me, and if there are items that view your alignment you can have an evil item that you have to hide or bluff about but have your reputation be that you’re some kind of angelic human being.

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I’ve also noticed a few spelling mistakes and missing words in some of the texts, I’ll go through them again and see if I can tell you exactly which.

I remember there was one where instead of we’ll it was written we’’ll.

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There could also be things that rely on your rep rather than your actual alignment. Like, demonic or otherwise skills that rely on you being known as bad/good rather than actually being bad/good. I dunno.

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I have no idea if the Romance options are mainly limited by gender, but I kind of hope we have a few characters where either gender works. For example Xiwen or Tigress or Ai.

I also kind of hope I can eventually romance the Demon Queen’s son. It’ll probably have to happen very late in the game, the option for that.

Like, I’m thinking, once we’re really powerful and let’s say Mo Long eventually gets really strong, helps us destroy He Clan or take over He Clan or something and we can eventually help him either destroy his mother or something else of the sort, perhaps eventually learn his skill. I dunno.

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The author lives in Russia and any mention of LGBTQ+ can be considered extremest and could get the author in serious trouble so they had to remove any gay content from the story

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Ah, I see, understandable. Maybe once the game is complete someone could eventually mod that in. It does make some sense for the world the game is supposed to be set in as well, but it would be fun to get some LGBTQ+ options one day and if it is ever possible. It would be kind of interesting to have to struggle in that world to be accepted or to hide the relationship or end up becoming ultra-powerful to the point where nobody dares say anything. Or it would just be nice to have LGBTQ+ options that are fully accepted, either is good. lol

I walkthrough(ed)game three times, and at the first MC was captured and escaped by unclear way.  It's before coma event.

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So the ROs are strictly straight now?

i believe mei and tigress are not, but you cant be sure since the romances are not fleshed out yet.

though i believe Ruo is straight.

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Yeah, I feel like Ruo should be purely straight, makes sense for her/him to me, I don’t know why. It just feels right.

Although I kind of wish I could F/F with Ruo, it doesn’t feel like Ruo.

Mei feels like she could be both but I don’t think she would be. She would only accept your confession as a female if she needed you for something. Purely for the sake of manipulation.

Tigress I feel like she would be mainly straight but you could have a battle besties/friends with benefits relationship with her as a female, though nothing more.

Ai feels like you could be with her as a female.

Xiwen feels like you could be with him as a male.

I feel like for the same sex relationships it would be cool if when you’re confessing to eachother, depending on who, there’s a whole ‘I need to think about this’ situation.

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The author lives in Russia and any mention of LGBTQ+ can be considered extremest and could get the author in serious trouble so they had to remove any gay content from the stor

How do I export saves?

During the free roam parts of the game choose option labeled "Protected Save" and then the command to download the save file from there.

Ooh, okay, thanks

How big is muscular and how big is lean?

Entirely up to your imagination. In the past the choices would have impact on which attributes were easier to rise, but this was removed and the choice is now purely cosmetic.

is there a way to load the hard saves? i click on upload saves and pick the file but it does not load it.

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i believe you need to click upload save again after choosing the file, then it should either reload the save or it goes to the saved games at the top

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when the new update comes?

It's now updated to v. 0.14. Note, old saves won't be compatible because some of the systems were changed quite a bit.

Comrades, help, I made an account just for this one. No matter what I pick It ends with my spation thingy exploding and me dying D;
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Its because you kept the bomb Mei Mei gave you, you should have either used it or thrown it away when you had a chance, it even gave you a warning that if you were not gonna use it you should throw it away

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I don't understand why I can't choose anything else. It doesn't matter if I take the pill or not, this is the only thing I can select. Are the other two not written? I'm playing in browser if it matters.

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"Blow him up" requires MC to accept request they can get from Mei Mei before the expedition, if they're on good terms with her. The second option is only possible if you've refrained from using Golden Seed abilities while fighting Long Chen's underlings.

Oh okay, thank you.

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Been reading it on dashing, love it

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